Your poetry skills are great. I would like you to explain it to me more I really like it.

It kind of reminds me of that Eurythmics song - "When Tomorrow Comes". Oh, and also the Blackalicious song - "Nowhere Fast".

But, in it's own right...

I really like the second stanza. I certainly had to read it twice before I got it, but having worked it out I really like it. It flows quite nicely, and holds a simple yet complex idea. Good one!

The third stanza is a little bit trickier... the change from "I" and "You" to "They" seems strange to me. I think that the "They" is referring to the "I" and "You", and you've just changed from 1st person to 3rd person; but I'm not really sure why, so I'm not really sure if I'm understanding it properly. The theme of this stanza is interesting though because so often people seem to wait for the other person to make the first move.

The final stanza echoes your older poem, and it seems like you're seeing your current situation as another iteration of past ones.. with a new mirage and a new rose tantalizingly (If that's not a real word it should be ) within reach.

My only advice is that you need to stop hoping someone will find you. Dive into the waters, feel the petals against your skin, reach for the stars and don't wait for tomorrow - God has given us love so that we in turn can love so do it! It is better to have loved and lost, as they say... And something tells me that this time you could be onto a winner anyway!

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~katyj
A man is like a fraction whose numerator is what he is and whose denominator is what he thinks of himself. The larger the denominator the smaller the fraction.
-- Tolstoy

hey this is really good, i love that u continue the poems its a rad aspect to have keep up the awesomeness in writing